Mysterious Forest
(By Calan and Austin)
I was exploring the Deep, Dark forest as a secret agent being told that a helicopter flying above like a seagull fell to the ground there. The crew said that they just went to the ground mysteriously. They checked the and they still had a decent amount they had a tiny, little look outside and the helicopter wing was badly damaged. One member of the crew said they saw a shadow for a slight moment. I took a plain look “hello” I said echoing into the darkness. Suddenly there was a huge lot of leaves firing towards me like bullets. I felt something in my body coming up like a tortoise. I decided to ignore it, it wasn’t a problem at all, it probably wouldn’t even come. Some shadowy, dark figure in the trees like a swinging monkey. I slowly walked towards but just as the shadow was disappearing, the sneeze came up and at exactly wrong time “oh no why did it happen now” But it was too late, the figure was gone.
great use of smiles and metophrs I? we maybe for the two writers
ReplyDeletealex
Hi Calan
ReplyDeleteI love your story the similes were awesome.
Maybe next time you could add some show not tell.
Other that that great job : )
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http://odsshaylac.blogspot.com
Thanks - Shayla. 😀